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Some people believe that the experiences children have before they go to school will have the greatest effect on their future life. Others argue that experiences gained when they are teenagers have a bigger influence. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is widely believed that future life can be affected by the skills infants gain prior to school. Others,
however
, disagree with
this
 statement and deem that the experiences gained in teenagerhood can be more effective and powerful. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss both viewpoints and support my own response.
First
 and foremost, those, who are in favour of childhood experience have valid reasons to be concerned about a child's communication skills, code of conduct, language use and imagination. What I mean by
this
 is the skills mentioned above can be acquired by imitation and observation during childhood, especially at the age of 1 to 7.
As a result
, an infant learns how to behave in the community, develops manners when he/she is a teenager and becomes an ideal person in the impending who suits the society.
However
, another point that speaks for the role of teenhood for future success is starting to acquire what is wrong and what is right. It is a period of improving emotional positive and negative feelings towards parents and peers. It is undeniable that most children who behaved properly in their childhood may be distracted when they are youngsters and walk on the criminal road if brought up inadequately at the age of 13 or 14. That's why, more and more parents are trying to take the teenhood of their children into account, today. One could draw the conclusion that implementing achievement in the ultimate is not a frills thing. I totally believe that parents should pay attention to not only their young kids but the elder ones
also
.
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