Crime is a big problem in the world; many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion

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one of the serious challenges that most
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nations
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the nations
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around the
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face
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. Many authorities have extremely strict punishments but
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still exist. It would be argued by some that
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globally
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huge issue and there is no one
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solve it. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with
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statement because it only crucial in countries but the
world
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. On the one hand, there are a bunch of
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why
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think that society cannot remove
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with,
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the fact that many governments in the
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have extreme punishment but
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still exist.
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live
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in underprivileged
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families
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or with abused parents may have
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to commit
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, in the worst moment,
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human
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can do many things to survive,
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and even
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this
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behavior
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can break the law. Unfortunately, most
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societies
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the societies
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have
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situation.
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, despite
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receiving strict punishment,
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when they
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from
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, several
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do not have fear and they recommit
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, during imprisonment, many
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only do
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to improve prison facilities but
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no
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not
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learning
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occasional education. When
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, former
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are hard to find jobs and they may recommit
crimes
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.
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, I believe that
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is not
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big issue in the
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and can solve.
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, there are many globally serious problems
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as poverty, hunger and war.
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of things exist are currently
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attention from many
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and seemed as
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root of crime. These things are more vital and serious than
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.
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, we can partly reduce it by several stricter punishments
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as
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sentence
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sentences
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or even
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death penalty. It
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may be
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the warning to invoke fear when
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have
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to break the law.
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, during longer imprisonment, former
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may avoid
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crimes
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. In
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, some
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argue that
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criminals
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cannot be prevented because some
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break laws again and still exist.
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, I believe that crime is not a global problem and it can
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be prove
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prove
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proven
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by some stricter punishments.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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