Crime is a big problem in the world; many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion

Criminals
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one of the serious challenges that most
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nations
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around the
world
face
with
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. Many authorities have extremely strict punishments but
convicts
still exist. It would be argued by some that
criminals
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globally
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huge issue and there is no one
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solve it. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with
this
statement because it only crucial in countries but the
world
. On the one hand, there are a bunch of
reason
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why
people
think that society cannot remove
criminals
.
To begin
with,
although
the fact that many governments in the
world
have extreme punishment but
criminals
still exist.
People
live
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in underprivileged
family
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families

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or with abused parents may have
tendency
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a tendency
the tendency

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to commit
crimes
.
For example
, in the worst moment,
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a human
the human

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human
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humans

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can do many things to survive,
even
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and even

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this
behavior
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behaviour

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can break the law. Unfortunately, most
of
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societies
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the societies

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have
this
situation.
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, despite
of
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receiving strict punishment,
but
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when they
released
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are released

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from
jails
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jail

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, several
people
do not have fear and they recommit
crimes
.
For example
, during imprisonment, many
convicts
only do
renovation
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renovations

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to improve prison facilities but
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do no

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no
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not

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learning
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learn

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occasional education. When
releasing
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, former
convicts
are hard to find jobs and they may recommit
crimes
.
On the other hand
, I believe that
criminal
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crime

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is not
the
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big issue in the
world
and can solve.
Firstly
, there are many globally serious problems
such
as poverty, hunger and war.
These kind
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This kind
These kinds

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of things exist are currently
gotten
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getting

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attention from many
organization
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organizations

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and seemed as
a
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root of crime. These things are more vital and serious than
criminals
.
Secondly
, we can partly reduce it by several stricter punishments
such
as
longer
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a longer
the longer

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sentence
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sentences

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or even
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death penalty. It
is
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apply

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may be
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maybe

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the warning to invoke fear when
people
have
thinking
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thought

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to break the law.
For example
, during longer imprisonment, former
convicts
may avoid
commit
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committing

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crimes
. In
conclude
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, some
people
argue that
criminal
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criminals

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cannot be prevented because some
convicts
break laws again and still exist.
However
, I believe that crime is not a global problem and it can
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be prove

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prove
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proven

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by some stricter punishments.
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