Grandparents play a big role in the bringing up their grandchildren. Do you think it it useful for grandparents to be involved ? what is your opinion.

It is undeniable fact that
grandparents
can play an indispensable part in the bringing up their children. In fact,
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grandparents
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role is quite impactful as a supporter,
motivator
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motivators

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and
teacher
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.
This
essay will delve deeper into these in the impending paragraphs along with my opinion in the conclusion.
To begin
with, during the time of raising
grandchildren
, there are a lot of times when
grandchildren
feel emotionally and morally drained. Because of working parents,
grandchildren
may feel perplexed,
grandparents
can assist them in many ways by
listening
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them and understanding their situations along with solutions.
Hence
,
this
can
be resulted
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into
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a strong bond between them.
Moreover
,
grandparents
can give a vast knowledge of moral values.
For example
, how to deal with
the
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other people, how to control the emotions and how to respect the opposite gender in
a
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right way.
Thus
, all these can help
grandchildren
a good
citizen
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in the future.
Furthermore
, since
grandparents
have had a prowess
of
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in

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many pragmatic situations, during the bringing up their
grandchildren
, they can share their experiences with them.
Hence
,
this
may help their
grandchildren
in
various
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way
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like to deal
the
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with the

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pressure of studies and to take the decision wisely.
In addition
,
grandparents
can be the good companion
of
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to

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their
grandchildren
and in a friendly
way
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grandparents
can teach them many social and domestic skills.
For example
, cooking, co-operation, and table manners. To conclude, it is unequivocal that
grandparents
have a significant role in the bringing up their children. I believe their presence, during
this
time, can teach, support and motivate their
grandchildren
in the right directions.
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