In some countries, students are required to study a limited range of subjects from the age of fifteen. In other countries, however, students study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of each education system? Which system is better?

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some nations define a small range of fields for teenagers before
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the universities.
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, other high school
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various
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school. I subscribe to the view that the nations should focus on less special
subjects
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discussed in
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number of issues is being professional in
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career as soon as possible. The young generation has a high learning
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and during
this
time
can more concentrate on specific
subjects
, and promote basic knowledge. They can spend more
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familiar with their majors.
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, they can attend related workshops to build strong fundamentals. By way of illustration, some majors
such
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and knowledge before choosing them as
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main field.
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, focusing on more
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specific
time
of life span can provide more educational and career opportunities for pupils in the future. It means
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when
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students
get familiar with a myriad of
subjects
they can find their talents and improve their skills and gain rewarding experience to build
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for the future.
Furthermore
, I believe that before entering university,
students
have more
time
, more creative
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and stronger memory to learn and study,
thus
this
is the best
time
to
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them
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schools.
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, in many developed countries,
education
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system
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plane
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different programs for high school
students
to help them to make the best decision. In conclusion, both theories are beneficial for teenagers, but I strongly believe that facing a variety of issues during their studies can guarantee
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future of them.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

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  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

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