Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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of individuals believe the basic environmental issue is
elimination
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the elimination

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of special
species
of creatures in our century.
On the other hand
, some people say other problems are more crucial. In my point of view,
loss
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the loss

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of particular
species
could change our planet and make it worse than now. In fact, some animals and plants are numerously important. Generally, most of them are the base of the food chain
in
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on

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our planet.
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,
importance
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the importance

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of some of them in food chains
are
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is

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more than
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that of

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of
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apply

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us. wheals, if they do not exist in future, the face of Earth would change.
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, Bees and butterflies are too necessary for plants’ pollination. whereas
,
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without
them
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a great number of plants would be omitted and if it is done, numerous
species
would get rid
of
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apply

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.
Furthermore
, omitting plants’ pollination which
human
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humans

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cause
this
our planet would rapidly be a mortal plot. Another idea is we have more important environmental issues which we do anything about them or we do not care
obviously
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about obviously

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. Ironically,
human
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humans

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make
recently
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a recently

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huge number of
problem
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problems

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in
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on

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Earth which do not consider
them
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or do not know
the
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their

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effects of them.
Besides
, he did not make attempt to solve them.
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, climate warming is a whole world problem which is able to
changes
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all sides of our life in future but because we could not
to
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see it directly, we do not think seriously about it. Basically, recent researches show the average
of
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apply

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Earth’s temperature is getting two degrees hotter in near future.
However
, developed countries which are responsible
of
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for

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that have not
consider
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considered

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it. But, it would
be happened
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if we want or not. In conclusion, I believe considering to loss of particular
species
are
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is

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as important as the other environmental happened and we have to care about it.
in addition
to, how we due to worry about
this
now, our
next
generation would live more comfortable.
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