Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The majority
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of individuals believe the basic environmental issue is
elimination
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the elimination
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of special
species
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of creatures in our century.
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, some people say other problems are more crucial. In my point of view,
loss
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the loss
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of particular
species
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could change our planet and make it worse than now. In fact, some animals and plants are numerously important. Generally, most of them are the base of the food chain
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our planet.
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,
importance
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the importance
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of some of them in food chains
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more than
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that of
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of
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us. wheals, if they do not exist in future, the face of Earth would change.
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, Bees and butterflies are too necessary for plants’ pollination. whereas
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without
them
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a great number of plants would be omitted and if it is done, numerous
species
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would get rid
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.
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, omitting plants’ pollination which
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humans
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cause
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our planet would rapidly be a mortal plot. Another idea is we have more important environmental issues which we do anything about them or we do not care
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about obviously
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. Ironically,
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humans
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make
recently
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a recently
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huge number of
problem
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problems
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in
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on
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Earth which do not consider
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or do not know
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effects of them.
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, he did not make attempt to solve them.
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, climate warming is a whole world problem which is able to
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all sides of our life in future but because we could not
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see it directly, we do not think seriously about it. Basically, recent researches show the average
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Earth’s temperature is getting two degrees hotter in near future.
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, developed countries which are responsible
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that have not
consider
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considered
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it. But, it would
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happen
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if we want or not. In conclusion, I believe considering to loss of particular
species
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are
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is
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as important as the other environmental happened and we have to care about it.
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to, how we due to worry about
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now, our
next
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generation would live more comfortable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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