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Nowadays many students choose to study abroad at university level. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad, and give your own opinion about whether it is a good idea.

#students #study #university #level #idea
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It is undeniable that
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 majority of
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 pretend to acquire knowledge in universities to obtain
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. There are various conflicting views
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 acquiring some
skills
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university
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 arguments.
Firstly
, providing learning free can increase
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 of applicants from different
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 of
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, which can lead to
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 distribution of
people
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 significant
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 in the future.
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 educational performance,
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 developing industry obtains high knowledgeable scientists
hence
 improving the level of technologies.
Secondly
,I would show the negative side of
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,In my point of view
people
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 way of thinking,those who are extremely intelligent can get a grant to study
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university
.
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Especially
 ,they can make an effort to expend time and consolidate
skills
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 valuable aspect for
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the university
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 to accept
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.
By contrast
,wealthy
people
 that have money,want to study in private universities,
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 they did,but they don’t have
such
 diverse knowledge as
people
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 private education
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.I assume,
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a human
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humans
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 who
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 rich commonly retrieve
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an inconceivable
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level
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levels
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 of
skills
 studying in private universities,because that type of
people
 highly regarded education,
that is
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. To sum up,I endorse trying to apply
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university
,without using
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backround
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background
,that will be a pretty good attempt to use your veritable
skills
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feal
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 the real validity of fundamental education,
this
 has implications for the future.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic excellence
  • career prospects
  • cultural exposure
  • global perspective
  • networking opportunities
  • personal growth
  • financial burden
  • tuition fees
  • living expenses
  • travel costs
  • homesickness
  • cultural shock
  • personal well-being
  • recognition of degrees
  • academic terminology
  • communication nuances
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