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A number of people are moving from rural areas to cities. Is it a positive or a negative development?

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Migration
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The migration
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 of many individuals from
villages
 to
cities
 can be seen in today’s world.
This
 trend will have adverse effects in future because of
increase
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an increase
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 in crowdedness in
cities
,
lack
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a lack
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 of development
of
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in
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 rural
areas
along with
 increase in pollution. The above development will lead to higher population density in
cities
.
This
 is because in the same area of
cities
 where fewer
people
 were living before, now more
people
 coming from
villages
 will try to reside.
For example
, when Delhi opened its gates to
laborers
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labourers
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 from nearby
villages
, the
people
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number of people
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 living in every
one kilometer
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one-kilometer
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 area got doubled.
As a result
 of
shortage
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a shortage
the shortage
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 of resources caused
due to
this
 action, there will be inflation in
prices
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the prices
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 of property and food items, which will make the lives of
people
 living in
cities
 difficult.
Besides
 the negative effect on city
people
’s lives, it will leave the rural
areas
 undeveloped. The reason behind the same is that when these
areas
' talented
people
having
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who have
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 more education or skills
will
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shift to
cities
, there will be no one left to uplift the
villages
. As the resources,
such
 as land, of
villages
 will not come to any use, the country’s economy will be affected.
Moreover
, the environment gets polluted. As more
people
will
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start generating more waste, improper dumping of litter may deteriorate the quality of soil.
Further
, the increased use of vehicles will produce more harmful emissions, decreasing the air quality.
Therefore
, the residents of these places may have to suffer from various health issues.
For instance
, the air quality index of Delhi shifted from unhealthy to poisonous in
last
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the last
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 decade
due to
migration
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the migration
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 of 1 lakh new
people
in
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into
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this
 metropolitan city. In conclusion, owing to increased congestion of urban
areas
, no progress in
countryside
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the countryside
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, and harm to
environment
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the environment
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, urbanization is a negative development.
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