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Some people think that money is one of the most essential factors in promoting happiness. Do you think people can be happy without much money? What other factors contribute towards happiness?

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Money
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 is considered by many people to be one of the most important contributing factors towards
happiness
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. In my opinion, it is possible for people to be happy even if they have little
money
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 and other aspects of
life
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 can play a more vital role in creating
happiness
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.
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 having
money
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 brings
happiness
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 to a lot of people, it does not necessarily follow that people without
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 are,
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, unhappy. Take
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 the comparison between developing and developed countries, most Westerners would agree that people in developing countries are happier, enjoy stronger family connections and take more pleasure in the simplicities of
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 to a greater extent than those in developed countries. One way that people can gain
happiness
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 is through their work.
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, a doctor doing volunteer work in underdeveloped countries may have very little
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money but
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money, but
 the reward of helping people and doing the job they are good at, brings
happiness
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 in itself.
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,
happiness
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 can be found by using skills that people are trained for and through job satisfaction.
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, another factor influencing
happiness
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 is having supportive and loving people in one’s
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. While
money
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 may bring the opportunities to enjoy pleasures, few people would enjoy them on their own. Being surrounded by a loving and caring family is considered by most people to be more valuable than any amount of
money
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. In conclusion,
money
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 is not essential for
happiness
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, which can be found through job satisfaction as well as family. If more people strived in
life
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 towards true
happiness
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 rather than
money
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, the world would be a better place.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Promoting happiness
  • Essential factors
  • Financial stability
  • Material wealth
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Contentment
  • Basic needs
  • Maslow's hierarchy of needs
  • Social connections
  • Pursuing passions
  • Well-being
  • Mental health
  • Spiritual practices
  • Personal growth
  • Community service
  • Societal contribution
  • Philanthropy
  • Joy
  • Satisfaction
  • Prosperity
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