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Opinions are divided on whether physical fitness or
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attitude is significant in
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success
in
sports
. I will discuss and analyse both of these points of view in detail in
this
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muscular strength and physical tolerance are vital to
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in
sports
. Undoubtedly, lean and weak individuals cannot play well to defeat
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opponents in the
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play grounds
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.
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,
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the physical stamina and ability to cope with tiredness,
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the chances of winning for a team.
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,
physical
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ability to perform
outstanding
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in
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brilliant results.
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, the significance of
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ability to deal with the different circumstances and situations in
sports
is equally indispensable. Players with
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attitude have more chances of
success
compared to their negative minded counterparts.
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, an optimistic sportsman takes
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positively and
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lessons from them which assist him to gain
success
and achievements in the future.
Thus
, without a positive mind, players cannot make their way through
sports
towards an exceptional and extraordinary
success
in their sporting careers. In conclusion, definitely, physical stamina ensures triumph in games but no one can deny the importance of mental aptitude for
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victory in
sports
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therefore
, believe that
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success
in
sports
requires
atheletes
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to be strong both physically as well as mentally.
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