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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many
people
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 argue what is the best way to reduce
crime
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. Some
people
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 believe the most effective way to reduce crimes is to give prisoners longer sentences, while others believe there are other ways to minimize the
crime
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 numbers. There are many reasons why
people
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 can commit a
crime
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such
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 as poverty, greed, lust, gluttony, and sloth. They know their action can lead them to prison, but sometimes those
people
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 are in a pinch situation. Prisoners receive sentences depending on the
crime
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 they do. While many
people
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 believe by serving in jail, these prisoners will rethink what
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 they committed.
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, murderers are usually sentenced
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 15 to 25 years in jail. While corruptors, they usually sentenced from 5 until 10 years, depending on how much money they take. Despite
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 method is actually used to set an example in many countries,
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, it seems that the
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 number is still increasing every year. While many
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also
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 believed that there are some other ways to reduce the
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 numbers.
People
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 who have a strong background in
education
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 are unlikely to do a
crime
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. The reason behind it is that they can tell the difference between good deeds and bad deeds. That's why a good
education
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 is needed in the early days for many adolescents. In conclusion, to reduce the
crime
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 number, I believe
education
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 needs to be the focal point. Without proper
education
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, the younger generation can't differentiate between good and bad acts. While punishment
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 as longer sentences needs to be changed, it's better to have a death sentence, if one committed a horrendous
crime
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.
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