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Animals are in danger of extinction. Some people say that we should protect only those animals, which are useful to humans. Do you agree or disagree?

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From our
exsistence
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existence
insistence
 on the earth animal kingdom is human's Companion. It is reckoned by a stratum of society that those
creatures
 should be conserved those are beneficial for
human
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 while others find it challenging to concur advocating with it. I endorse wholeheartedly
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the latter view.
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the
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own length.
First
 of all, it is
animal's
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an animal's
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right
 to live safe and protected on the earth. From the
begining
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beginning
, they are human
Companion
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Companions
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however
,
now a days
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nowadays
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, people vanishing the
wild life
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wildlife
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 for their selfishness. Mostly faunas are killed by humans for fun,food and fur.
In addition
,
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an individual
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individual
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individuals
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also
cutting
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 down the
habitate
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habitat
 which eventually
destroying
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destroys
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 the animals.
Therefore
,
i
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 feel that it is brutal to let them alone
to
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face
catastrophe
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the catastrophe
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 that has been made by ours to meet our demands. Due to their
right
, we should have
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to save
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save
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 and protect each and every species of animal.
Moreover
, if we will save only useful
creatures
, it will lead to a
disastor
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disaster
. It begs the question:
how
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 it could be possible. The reason behind
is
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this is
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 that every creature is necessary for our ecosystem whether it is directly or indirectly. If we do not save all the
creatures
,
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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get
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 unbalanced. As a consequence
human
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humans
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 can not
Survive
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survive
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 on
this
 earth. It is
poroving
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proving
 that all animals
plays
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 a vital role,
therefore
 we have to Save them. To conclude, all
creature
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creatures
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 should be protected because it is their
right
 and they are
also
 crucial
for
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to
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 our
exsistence
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existence
. The state should have to take action
right
 now on the priority to conserve all the
creatures
.
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