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The spread of multinational companies and the increase of globalization produces positive effects for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Modern life admits limitless opportunity for all the countries within multinational companies. I think multinational companies can be definable in 2 ways. One of these,is a company which has
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many chains in every local place,
on the other hand
, a company which has a lot of workers in all sorts of different parts of the world. I agree
that is
 positive effects for everyone.
First
 of all, I want to discuss what I mentioned above, a corporate that might be reached every place in the world. It might enable them to recognize the sort of culture which causes produce for the native population`s wants and
this
 can lead to the unique designs produced that belong to them. In my opinion, globalization has to be included diversity for every site.As much as, in recent years modernity teaching us the same lifestyles,
however
, we know that our traditions are disparates. In
this
 case,
for example
, if a firm has grown into a multinational organization with more than 200 affiliates in 17 countries, it should be successful.
Further
, a business has appeal to everyone, only if they can choose the person who has a multi-national,
otherwise
 it comes to a deadlock.Because
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 I think where we come from creates our perspective towards life and it can be useful when we decided or find a solution for any issues. Multifaceted companies can always push themselves forward by
this
 means. Taking everything into consideration , diversity makes us who we are, ,
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 it means globalization and respect for each people because we are all members all Stuf same planet.
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