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As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom.

#computers #education #role #teachers #classroom
Technology
 has spread tremendously in every sector changing the conventional way of doing things.An increasing number of
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relies
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 on
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the computer
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computer
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 to do research for information and produce
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 for school purposes.Other
students
 prefer online classes for the purposes of flexibility. Laptops are trending in learning institutions
such
 that
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 role in
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 will soon be overtaken by
technology
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,
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 advancement has greatly improved the way of doing
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 learners.
Moreover
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 facilitated
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 class to study online while still working without pressure from work as well as co-ordinating family matters.
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, sources of information
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 more available with
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 of digital books
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 that library materials can be accessed through an online platform.
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 research done by Meru University
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 that 90% of
students
 have access to
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 platform.
Therefore
,
technology
 has
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 the progress of studying for
students
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in contrast
 to physically attend to a lecture.
Secondly
,despite the computer advancement,there
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 roles that cannot be replaced by
technology
.Teachers are required in
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 process as they are able to fill the gap of
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deficit
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such
 that they help them solve their problems by repeating the explanation,giving
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 or having a private tutor.
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,
students
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 a higher chance of not failing
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any subject.
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,
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 research done by the University of Nairobi indicates that 90% of
students
 attending physical classes pass their
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.
Therefore
,the presence of a teacher is essential as it
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students
 in a positive way.
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In conclusion
,teachers play an important role in
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such
 that no matter how complex
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computer
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become
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 replacing the role of a teacher
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in terms
 of
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interaction
integration
 will not be a walk in the park.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • Digital learning
  • Personalized guidance
  • Blended learning
  • Remote education
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Human interaction
  • Cultural dimension
  • Mentorship
  • Critical thinking
  • Educational technology
  • Learning outcomes
  • Role model
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