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While some people consider global warming to be the most pressing environmental problem now, others believe that deforestation has a more detrimental effect. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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While it is widely claimed that the most urgent environmental issue is global warming, some argue that
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 has a more pessimistic effect. Both points of view and the reason why I believe that people should pay their most attention to global warming will be elaborated on in
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 with, it might seem sensible for some to believe that climate change has affected temperature all over the world.
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 is possibly because it has contributed to
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 in extreme weather events
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 as heavy storms, downpours and flooding. Studies carried out by Oxford University,
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, revealed that hurricanes are likely to become more intense, on average, in a warming world.
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, opponents of
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 should be taken into a consideration as the most pressing ecological matter these days. To put
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, they consider that individuals should opt for promoting tree planting and restoring forests. In
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age,
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, many countries are more likely to experience unhealthy air pollution caused by
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. From
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 perspective, it is understandable why some would prefer
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 to be the most urgent environmental issue. Personally, I would argue in favour of people considering global warming as a crucial issue on the sustainability of the environment, seeing that they tend to disregard the ecological consequences of their actions.
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, if human activities incessantly release large amounts of carbon dioxide and other greenhouse gases into the atmosphere,
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 could cause detrimental effects on the world,
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 as burning fossil fuels from car emissions.
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more awareness to select alternative energy, it could reduce the planet-warming effects of fossil fuels. In conclusion,
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 it is undeniable that
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 should be considered
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the most important problem of the environment, I am of the opinion that climate change should be taken into a problem solving as a priority in order to mitigate the pessimistic effects of environmental damage contributed by the human activities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pressing environmental problem
  • detrimental effect
  • global warming
  • deforestation
  • rising temperatures
  • melting ice caps
  • extreme weather events
  • biodiversity loss
  • carbon emissions
  • water cycle disruption
  • ecosystems
  • forest growth
  • carbon dioxide
  • mitigation strategies
  • renewable energy sources
  • reforestation
  • scale of impact
  • human intervention
  • long-term consequences
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