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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The environment has now become one of the most serious problems that humans have to deal with. While some people argue that these problems should be solved globally, others think it is better to handle them on a national scale. In my opinion, I believe
countries
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 should work together to tackle these
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 of the environment. On the one hand, there are some reasons why each nation should address its environmental question.
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, a similar type of environmental problem in different regions often has varied causes.
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, Australia faces the challenge of land degradation mainly due to over-grazing, yet Indonesia’s degraded land is caused by deforestation.
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, those nations might plan appropriate solutions independently.
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, each country has its priority at various stages of development. While developing
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 as some nations in Africa are prioritising clean water supply, industrialized nations,
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, China and United States are more likely concerning about air and traffic pollution.
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, the alternative suggestion of facing environmental
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 globally seems more likely to be effective in practice. One obvious example is the issue of global warming which has a detrimental impact worldwide.
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, collaboration and agreements among states in the world are needed to tackle it. Another consideration is that some developing societies may lack the experiences and techniques to handle environmental
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 effectively. If developed
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 can help to provide technology or funding support to those developing
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, the process of dealing with environmental
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 would be much quicker. In conclusion,
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 it may seem easier to solve the environmental problems nationally, in practice, dealing with these
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 would be more effective when working on a global scale.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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