When someone achieves greatness thanks to an innovation or other breakthrough, it is usually agreed that the individual has a high level of intelligence. Do you think that inborn thinking skills play the main role in the successful life of people? What role does ‘nurtured’ intelligence play i achievements n of a successful person?

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It is believed that most people achieve their goals thanks to an inborn brilliance,
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from my point of view inborn
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huge role in
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life of humans and the
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that have been gained through personal experiences are
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valuable. Genes have been considered
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one of the most important and one of the most influential factors that can affect the understanding of a child for a long time. There have been made a lot of
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in the sphere of psychology to learn what influence they have. The
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kids
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-born children in most families have inherited
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high IQ and showed higher scores at
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to their younger siblings. These findings supported the influence of inborn intellectual abilities on
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successful life, providing evidence for supporters of
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which confronted the previous ones and showed that environment and life experience have affected the mind of
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development of children varies due to the various environment they are raised
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factors
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as nutrition, home environment and formal schooling have been highlighted as the ones that affect
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of children. It shows that abilities that have been gained through their own experience had more influence than the
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that they inherited from parents. In summary, the
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and abilities that have been gained through personal wisdom
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role in achieving success.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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