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Should students learn a second language at school? Do you Agree or Disagree.

#students #second #language #school
I DEFINITELY agree that
students
 should learn a
second
language
 at
school
.
This
 is for many reasons,
language
 can help in communication and it can
also
 help to
increase
concentration
. Not only
this
 but
languages
also
increase
 speed. These are only a small amount of reasons from a big category. Most importantly, learning
languages
 in
school
 can help communication. Sometimes there may be new
student
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 or teachers that say a different
language
this
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which
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 might make a simple task almost three times harder. Scientists have proven that learning a
second
language
 at
school
 can help
students
 later on in life.
This
 is because learning the extra
language
 at an early age can make the
language
 more prominent and fluent later on. And when
students
 get jobs they might need to cooperate with people from across the world.
Furthermore
,
languages
 can help to
increase
concentration
.
Concentration
 is a must because schools are useless when nothing is getting
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 into a student's brain.
Concentration
 is
also
 improved because in
language
students
 have to concentrate on little sounds and letters.
This
 is a clear use of
concentration
 and will
also
 be applied to other subjects.
Finally
,
languages
increase
 productivity. Research clearly shows that an extra
language
 puts a bigger
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work load
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 on
students
 as an extra subject
this
 will help them in the other parts of
school
 because they will soon get used to the higher
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workload
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work load
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.
This
 means that
students
 get faster to adapt to the extra work. To wrap up,
languages
 can be very helpful. Whether
its
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 because of communication or
concentration
. It can
also
 help in productivity. Whatever it is
language
are
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 something that must be taught in every
school
.
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