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These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work what could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

#fathers #home #care #children #mothers #work #development
nowadays, with the progress of the technology, we witness many changes in our life,
for example
, we can see a big number of
men
 will stay at home and
women
 go out to
work
,
this
 essay will check both views and I express my opinion in the end. On the one hand, in the past
women
 do not allow to go to
work
 and they did not need to their
work
 when
men
work
 outside they can provide for all of the needs of their families,
furthermore
, they could save much money for their future but today everything is changed and there are economic problems for
this
 reason, whether, woman and man should
work
 out of the home, until they can provide their needs,
for example
, in my country,
women
 did not
work
, before but today they have a job
such
 as
men
, and they can not live with one wage.
On the other hand
, there are few
men
 who stay at the house and take care of their children,
in addition
, not only they should
work
 more than before but
also
 they can not meet their needs with several jobs,
for instance
, there are major people in my town who have two or three jobs and they live to hard, there is economic pressure in my country and more of good jobs are belong to
women
 and in overall
women
 have a good opportunity and good income in comparison to
men
, In conclusion, in my opinion,
this
 is a negative point for any country that countries
men
 stay at the house and
women
 want to go to
work
, they should both contribute to different life issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breadwinner
  • caregiving
  • paternal leave
  • societal perceptions
  • gender roles
  • flexible working conditions
  • personal preference
  • father-child relationship
  • emotional and social development
  • household responsibilities
  • career opportunities
  • professional achievements
  • balanced parenting
  • earning potential
  • social stigma
  • societal pressure
  • discrimination
  • traditional mindsets
  • resentment
  • adjustment
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