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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
In
this
 contemporary era, most
of
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the
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people are willing
become
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 bilingual or multilingual.
Moreover
, they pursue to obtain
this
 skill because they believe it may be definitely useful in their lifetime. Wherever people
travelled
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 to international countries due to their own purposes, where they have to speak new another nation's mother tongue.
However
, some of them declare it may
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be cause
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because
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 in a detrimental way, especially, socially and practically in their daily lives.
This
 essay will focus on
this
 statement and eventually I will explain my opinion too.
To begin
 with, the communities who are living in foreign nations without any knowledge
about
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native
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their native
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language
 in there, whenever they have to face critical problems in their personal life.
Such
 as, when we
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want
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 know about directions, household items and information.
For example
,
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foreigner
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foreigners
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 who
do
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 not know about a foreign
language
, are not able to write documents or applications in their personal circumstances.
Therefore
, it makes to waste time and money
for
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 translations and it becomes more annoying and
shame
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 for them.
In addition
,
this
also
 seriously caused on social manner. When
non natives
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who
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want to who
want
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towant
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 make new relationships without
language
skil
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skills
 , has impacted badly in their personalities.
For instance
, wherever native communities have celebrated festivals while foreigners do not engage
with
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 these activities because without ability in
native
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language
, have to
facing
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oppositions
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by
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that local society.
As a result
, sometimes it
harmful
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is harmful
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 for their internal life because of
harresments
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harassment
harassments
 and violations. In conclusion, from my perspective, I believe
who
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does
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 not know anything about other languages rather than
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their mother
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 tongue, have to
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 conflicts
from
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 society. Particularly, when we have planned to abroad
,
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before
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we want to learn that
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language
 because it becomes
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a precious
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 resource
for
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 our lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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