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Write a letter to your friend Alex who has just graduated from a Law School and is looking for his first job. In your letter write: congratulate your friend on his graduation give some tips about where to find a job give some tips on how to prepare for a job interview

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Dear Alex, Congratulations on graduating from the Law School!
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 because you chose your occupation and you were one of the best among
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! I'll try to give you some tips on where to search for a job.
First,
use linkedin.com to find your first position.
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 is necessary in order to gain practical experience and knowledge. After that, you will have at least two options,
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 mean, you can continue your career in
this
 organization or leave it and go to a larger and more famous company like Amazon or Microsoft and get your dream job there. I'm sure talented lawyers are in demand everywhere. When going for an interview, I recommend preparing all the documents
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portfolio, a passport. Buy a document folder - it's convenient and safe.
Also
, wear a business suit - you need to look good. The first interview can be quite stressful , so write in a notebook the questions you are going to ask,
for example
 about salary, holidays, working schedule or bonuses. And most importantly, don’t worry and stay calm, anyway, it is a valuable experience for you. Best wishes, Vladimir
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coherence cohesion
Consider organizing the letter into clearer paragraphs, each focusing on a single main idea. For example, separate putting tips for finding a job and preparing for an interview into distinct paragraphs.
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Include more details about specific job search strategies, such as networking events and legal job boards, to make your advice more comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
The letter is structured logically with a clear greeting at the beginning and a closing at the end.
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The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend, which makes it engaging and personal.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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