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In some countries, students are required to study a limited range of subjects from the age of fifteen. In other countries, however, students study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of each education system? Which system is better?

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Each country has its own educational system with different types of
the
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syllabus. In some
systems
 ,
for example
, the Thai education system,
students
 are required to
study
 a limited
range
 of
subjects
 in high school while in some
systems
,
such
 as the US, and UK
students
 can
study
 a wide
range
 of
subjects
.
Both
systems
 have advantages and disadvantages, in my opinion. To
study
 a limited
range
 of
subjects
 from the age of fifteen,
students
 need to make a decision on their
study
 path and career path at the early stage of education.
This
 system can cause
students
 to be well-prepared for their higher education in university,
for example
, in engineering, architecture, medicine, etc. Studying a limited
range
 of
subjects
 makes the course more in-depth and more specific to prepare
students
 for their
study
 path.
However
,
students
 studying a wide
range
 of
subjects
 can lead to more freedom to explore themselves and what they like. At the age of fifteen, lots of
students
 are still not sure about their life after graduation, with the wide
range
 of
subjects
,
students
 can explore the subject that they are interested in with no compulsory core modules.
For instance
, a student can
study
both
 Spanish and biology.
Both
 of the
systems
 have different aspects of benefit, a wide
range
 of
subjects
 is better in my opinion. From my experience studying limited
subjects
 only Math-Science, which limited my choice in university as well. At that age,
students
 are still exploring themselves and shouldn’t be limited by the choice they made. I was limited to Math-Science but I was
also
 interested in arts, history, and philosophy as well that I couldn’t choose to
study
. In conclusion,
both
 educational
systems
 have their own benefit, from my personal view, a wide
range
 of
subjects
 is better because that can give
students
 the freedom to explore different
subjects
 they are interested in.
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