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Some people say that it is a important to kept your house and workplace tidy. With everything organised and it is placed .what is your opinion about this.

#people #house #workplace
To begin
with
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 at a house
people
 capt that
things
 in well organised that it should not hygiene
for example
 in the kitchen we do all
things
 in their
place
 and clean it in a proper way so that the food and not hygiene.
Secondly
,
people
 put some
items
 in their
place
.
Such
 as laser, if a laser is put on a desk but someone does not see
the
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them
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 so they are injured and step over it.
Furthermore
 at
workplace
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the workplace
a workplace
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 if a
people
 put
items
 in the right
place
 it shows their impression of
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the
a
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person of his colleagues. In
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 in the office
people
 decorated their desks in a proper manner so that they do not lose their
items
 and important documents that are given by the manager .
for example
,
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 if
people
 should not organise their
things
 in a proper way so that they leave an impression against their colleagues and friends. In ,conclusion if
people
 give their
things
 the proper way and everything organise in their
place
 because of
these
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 they cannot lose
their
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any
items
 or anything.
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