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Many young people nowadays are imitating celebrities in sports and movies. In your opinion, is this good or bad?

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Television is the greatest tool of modern technology. It is evident from the fact that television programmes and shows impacted the masses in a way that they tried to emulate their favourite stars. Having said that,
this
 is not a favourable facet of the mass media and is pushing our youngsters to the darkroom. In
this
 day and age, people try to imitate film stars by trying to look like them, spending exorbitant amounts of money on their physical appearance in the process.
This
 is mostly seen in millennials because they were born in that phase of time where there are very few examples of real-life heroes.
Consequently
, they are left with no option other than to follow megastars, whose portrayal on screen is shown as larger than life, and to enjoy the finest luxuries of life.
Hence
, followers of these personalities admire them for their ability to escape from the harsh realities of life.
Additionally
, actors are involved in performing not-so-good activities
such
 as drinking and smoking, which could have a negative impact on the impressionable minds of the kids.
Also
, the delinquent performances by the protagonist encourage the younger generation toward unethical and criminal activities.
However
, some sports and
athletes
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 personalities try to inspire and encourage children toward fitness, determination, and paving the way to reach the ultimate goal of their lives. I reckon that they should restrain themselves from these false starts.
Furthermore
, we should disseminate information through the media and educate people about real heroes who bring positive change in themselves and the people around them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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