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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects?

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Due to the substantial rise in population, some
people
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 believe that edible
insects
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 are an alternative
food
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 source for
humans
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.
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, many
people
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 argue that eating
insects
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 are unhealthy and have a negative impact on nature. In my opinion, there are many other possible solutions for
food
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 support.
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, edible
insects
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 worms and grasshoppers have many benefits to the environment and help balance the ecosystem.
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, worms are the main
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 source for other animals
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 as chickens and fish. The idea of consuming edible
insects
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 in
humans
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 will significantly reduce the number of
insects
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 in nature which will create drastic effects on the number of other plants and animals.
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, many types of
insects
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 can be poisonous and lethal to
humans
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, and eating
insects
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 could be risky.
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,
insects
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 are considered non-hygienic due to their habitat and
food
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 source.
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,
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 there are other alternative
food
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 sources
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 as fruits, vegetables, rice and corn that are safer and easier to cultivate.
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, in some cultures
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 as Thailand, it is common for
people
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 to consume
insects
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for example
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 fried worms and fried grasshoppers. With the advantages of the availability in the area, cheaper price or even free and considered more nutritious than other types of meats, especially in protein. Some
people
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 still believe that eating
insects
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 have more benefits than drawbacks. In conclusion, from my personal view, consuming
insects
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 can be risky for
humans
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 and negatively impacts nature.
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, there are many other
food
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 sources available which are healthier and easier to cultivate.
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