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Many museums charge admission fees while other are free. Do the advantages of charging people to visit a museum outweigh the disadvantages?

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Charging admission
fees
instead
 of free means
museums
 can have more income. It is not unusually to see some
museums
 beginning to charge admission
fees
 nowadays. I wholeheartedly agree that the disadvantages of charging people to visit a museum outweigh the advantages. Certainly, there are several advantages to charging admission
fees
. The
first
 is on protecting heritage. Indeed, as
museums
 begin to charge
fees
, more available income can be used on more activities which can protect heritages effectively. Another, visiting
museums
 becomes a luxury activity which will lead to few visitors. It benefits staff to manage
museums
 which can better protect relics. Despite these advantages, the disadvantages are far more significant. While few visitors benefit from
management
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, there is no doubt that visiting
museums
 becomes an exclusive activity for elites. It is unfair that lower-class people lose the opportunity which will compound class solidification and class conflicts. A
further
 issue is the number of tourists will decrease.
This
 will reduce the exchange of different cultures. In conclusion, it is clear that some
museums
 have charged
fees
.
Although
 some people may find its benefits, I strongly believe that the downsides for visitors,
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 are far greater.
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