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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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In nowadays Society,Some families might prefer to renting accommodation rather than buy.Some communities believe that owning a
house
 is the better option.
This
 essay will illustrate 2 Side views including my own opinion,
To begin
 with, there are several advantages of owning a
house
.
First
 of all, it is good for long-term living that
people
 can live without
house
 responsible.
For example
, setting up furniture in a flat might cause some hall holes from screws that would impact maintenance costs.
Furthermore
, many couples who are married might choose to buy a
house
 because they want to settle down and have descendants that will create a larger family space.
On the other hand
, accommodation rented could be more convenient and less cost to spend too.
For instance
, renting a flat is not only easier when paying an annual fee but
also
 the safe significant cost of
house
 tax.
Moreover
, it would be great to lose less payment from wages, so
people
 could have much saving money.
consequently
, they have a lot of facilities
because
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ofbecause
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 most rent accommodation near to the city centre or public transport. In fact, China is one example of new generation ideas, more and more
people
 choose to rent some flat because of the huge population and the government need to build a tall and larger room to deal with increases in demand. Another reason is that
people
 do not want to leave for too long, they mostly live for a short term and immigrate in the future. In conclusion, it could be argued that owning a
house
 is better in strong settling down but renting in these days society is more popular with less cost and affordable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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