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some people claim that too much focus and resources have been spend to protect wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Many
people
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 believe that nowadays, greater attention and ample amount of money
is
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are
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 being used for the conservation of
animals
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 and birds.
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, I completely disagree with
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 notion and in my
opinion
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 it is indeed the duty of the government as well as
people
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 to contribute
in
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to
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 the preservation of the wildlife. It is not uncommon these days that many
animals
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 are dying either due to natural calamities
such
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 as global warming and water floods or
by
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apply
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man made
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 problems
such
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 as deforestation.
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, many species are on the verge of extinction
such
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 as
Chinese
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the Chinese
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 Panda and Indian Tiger. Pertaining to
this
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, many countries worldwide have made a provision for building a significant number of
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wildlife
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wild life
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wildlife
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 centuries where these
animals
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 can be kept and provided
goodcare
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good care
.
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, if necessary measures are taken
such
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 as providing them
natural
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 habitats they can surely be saved from vanishing. Other than
this
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, undoubtedly, wildlife
animals
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 are very important for the heritage of a country.
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 both the authorities and
people
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 should make cumulative efforts for the preservation of these creatures.
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, these days many organisations are being run by the
governmnet
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government
 as well as
people
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 for the welfare of
endagered
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endangered
animals
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. These
angios
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engines
anxious
 not only help in raising
fund
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funds
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 for the welfare of these species but they have many volunteers
also
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 who work for free for the welfare of these
animals
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. To summarize, it is very essential to preserve wildlife as they are very crucial for preserving
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a nations
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nations
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nations'
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 heritage and history. Authorities
as well as individuals
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, as well as individuals,
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 should equally contribute
for
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to
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 the preservation of these
animals
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. I strongly believe, that all the possible measures should be taken for the conservation of these creatures by providing them
a
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protective environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wildlife conservation
  • ecosystem preservation
  • sustainable development
  • biodiversity
  • habitat destruction
  • ecological balance
  • ethical responsibility
  • economic benefits
  • endangered species
  • poaching
  • education and awareness
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