some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. what is your opinion about this? what other time in history would be interesting to live in?

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In today's modern world, certain individuals claim that
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time is the most optimate time in
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history to be alive. In
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essay,I shall discuss the statement followed by providing a reasoned conclusion. personally,I strongly disagree with
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viewpoint because of all the personality disorders the development of technology has caused for millions of people all around the globe. Nowadays,with the omnipresence of social media
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a number of people are not satisfied with their lives due to the existence of several apps like Facebook,Twitter and especially Instagram.To be honest,I like the utilities but I resent the distractions these apps can inflict.
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,constant notifications do not let us
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focus on our lives.
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spaces have generated a terrible,useless competitive atmosphere as we can be notified when someone likes our pictures on Instagram.Many are too concerned if they can not get enough attention as much as their friends
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feel inadequate and entrance
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the depression world. I opine
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1370s would have been the best era to experience because of all the family attachments and closeness. In that fascinating
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there was a wide variety of opportunities for individuals to spend most of their
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with their families and acquaintances but now people spend most of their
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on their phones checking their notices and messages
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in touch with someone who they barely know. To summarize, I would like to admit that
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modernization has helped mankind get access to the impossible facts, to what cost? We have to pay
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mental health,our family ties and the chance to live a happy life in
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world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented
  • prosperity
  • technological advancements
  • global connectivity
  • longevity
  • opportunities
  • self-expression
  • renaissance
  • exploration
  • industrial revolution
  • roaring twenties
  • unparalleled
  • groundbreaking
  • transformative
  • revolutionary
  • epoch-making
  • flourished
  • transcended
  • innovations
  • distinguished
  • renaissance artists
  • explorers
  • innovative entrepreneurs
  • exhilarating
  • era
  • unforgettable
  • boom
  • vibrant
  • exuberant
  • transformed
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