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Many things that used to be done in the home by hands now being done by machines. Does the development bring more advantages or disadvantages.

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Through
technology
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 development, a significant number of housework are cleared by
machines
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.
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 brought quickness in completing
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 chores and
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 gave more spare
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 to
women
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 who usually had to tend the
house
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 by themselves.
Technology
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 upgraded the process of
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 chores through the automation, smoothness and quickness of deployed
machines
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.
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, washing
machines
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 have different options that help you to wash clothes at the preferred heat and
time
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, and
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, they calculate the estimated
time
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 for all the processes.
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, in the past,
women
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 had to go to nearby rivers and wash clothes, and the process could even take all the morning, depending on the cleanliness of the water, the number of clothes and the weather. Nowadays, the process of washing is directly done by the washing machine and it takes just a few hours. Another advantage is that
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 appliances automation gives more free
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 to
women
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 that can be employed in nurturing their skills or focusing on their hobbies.
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, rice cookers, kettles and cleaning robots do their work without the need of being supervised ,
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, they stop if the task is completed. In the meantime,
women
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 can focus on their hobbies,
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 as watching tv, reading, attending dance classes or simply resting.
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technology
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 development helped to relieve
women
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 from a significant part of
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 chores,
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, improving
women
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's well-being. In conclusion,
machines
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 brought considerable advantages to
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-related daily tasks' that
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 had positive effects on
women
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's well-being. I believe the use of
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house
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 appliances will become more common in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Automation
  • Efficiency
  • Manual labor
  • Displacement
  • Homemaking skills
  • Technological advancements
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Resource depletion
  • Energy efficiency
  • Social dynamics
  • Operational understanding
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