some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matter(such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their wishes. other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

Childhood is the best soul of phase compared to the other stages.
Moreover
, in
this
contemporary era, adolescents are becoming self-centred because their elders give liberty to do
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activities in daily life. Even though some of them argue that create bad effects
to
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child
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the child
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such
they always make decisions only think about themselves and others demonstrate
this attitude help children
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this attitude help child
these attitude help children
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to acquire productive plans in their lives.
This
essay will focus on these both views and I will elaborate on my opinion.
To begin
with, wherever adults are allowed to give limitless liberty to do
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tasks for their offspring . Due to
this
the child always becomes a ride and selfish among their family members.
For example
, when offspring
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watching television and they do not think about others' desires.
As a result
, these youngsters always try to
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other people are annoying to them in every
matters
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.
Furthermore
, these individuals are never able to collaborate and will have
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an incapability
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incapability
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to cooperate because of their unhealthy
decision making
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decision-making
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manner.
On the other hand
, a flip of the coin, whenever young generation make their own decisions in their
lifea
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life
lives
while they are able to
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productive and efficient opinions in their lifetime.
For instance
,
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student
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students
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who participated in debate
competition
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competitions
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particularly
they
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wanted to equip with quick decision making
skill
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because
this
helped them to get subject
matters
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matter
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against opponents.
Therefore
,
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will be able to get decisions to fulfil their business and other prosperous in their growth. In conclusion, in my perspective, I believe grown-ups should want to give
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liberty
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to
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youngsters to do things.
Also
, Even if they have space to get accurate matters with their adults' advice .
Additionally
, If
youth
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generation
become
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self-centred, it will become more vulnerable in our society and
also
if we do not allow
to
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them to
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get
such
things without their
parents
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desires, it will
also
impact
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a detrimental way to their personalities.
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