some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matter(such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their wishes. other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.
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Childhood is the best soul of phase compared to the other stages.
Moreover
, in this
contemporary era, adolescents are becoming self-centred because their elders give liberty to do any
activities in daily life. Even though some of them argue that create bad effects Correct your spelling
many
to
Change preposition
on
child
Add an article
the child
a child
such
they always make decisions only think about themselves and others demonstrate this attitude help children
to acquire productive plans in their lives. Change the determiner
this attitude help child
these attitude help children
This
essay will focus on these both views and I will elaborate on my opinion.
To begin
with, wherever adults are allowed to give limitless liberty to do any
tasks for their offspring . Due to Correct your spelling
many
this
the child always becomes a ride and selfish among their family members. For example
, when offspring is
watching television and they do not think about others' desires. Change the verb form
are
As a result
, these youngsters always try to proof
other people are annoying to them in every Replace the word
prove
matters
. Change to a singular noun
matter
Furthermore
, these individuals are never able to collaborate and will have Add an article
an incapability
incapability
to cooperate because of their unhealthy Replace the word
incapable
decision making
manner.
Add a hyphen
decision-making
On the other hand
, a flip of the coin, whenever young generation make their own decisions in their lifea
while they are able to Correct your spelling
life
lives
makes
productive and efficient opinions in their lifetime. Change the verb
make
For instance
, Add an article
a student
the student
student
who participated in debate Fix the agreement mistake
students
competition
particularly Fix the agreement mistake
competitions
they
wanted to equip with quick decision making Correct pronoun usage
apply
skill
because Fix the agreement mistake
skills
this
helped them to get subject matters
against opponents. Fix the agreement mistake
matter
Therefore
, tee
will be able to get decisions to fulfil their business and other prosperous in their growth.
In conclusion, in my perspective, I believe grown-ups should want to give Add an article
the tee
a tee
limit
Replace the word
limited
liberty
Correct article usage
the liberty
to
youngsters to do things. Change preposition
of
Also
, Even if they have space to get accurate matters with their adults' advice . Additionally
, If youth
generation Correct article usage
the youth
become
self-centred, it will become more vulnerable in our society and Change the verb form
becomes
also
if we do not allow to
get Correct pronoun usage
them to
such
things without their parents
desires, it will Change to a genitive case
parent's
parents'
also
impact in
a detrimental way to their personalities.Correct pronoun usage
them in
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