We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?

In the present world, the use of the computer is constantly on the rise. From a small to large businesses are using
computers
for every small and large complicated work. I believe in future
computers
can be used to do everything which we do physically and mentally. We should avoid using
computers
for each work and uses human beings
also
. In
this
essay, I am going to discuss how it can reduce
jobs
in the market and lead to health problems.
Firstly
,
computers
are constantly reducing human
jobs
and increasing unemployment.
For example
, in malls it reduces the
jobs
like you now can do self-checkout and in some stores, like dollarama, it is compulsory to do self-checkout. Even, stuff is placed on racks by the machine itself.
Also
, Amazon introduces the people-less store where you can go and buy things. So, it is reducing the people's
jobs
in future.
Thus
, it will cause unemployment.
Secondly
,
computers
make people unhealthy and lazy both mentally and physically.
For example
, nowadays we don't like to do complex calculations, we just use applications to do that which results in less brain exercise.
This
may lead to many obesity and diabetes. So,
computers
also
have a bad effect on our health. To conclude, Computer usage can cause unemployment and an unhealthy lifestyle. So, we should not use
computers
for everything.
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