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Some people think it is important to spend a lot of money on a wedding celebration, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #money #celebration
Many people have wedding dreams. It depends on many factors
such
 as financial, satisfaction or social value. Some of them believe that it is necessary to use more
budget
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 on the wedding celebrations. Some of them have different views. And I agree with the
first
 group.
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this
 essay will discuss, and give example, opinion, and supports from both sides. Wedding celebrations are important in the wedding process. It is one moment in life. Many people
such
 as families or friends from bride side and groom's side go to celebrate in wedding place.
For example
,
marriage
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married
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 couples will be reserved a restaurant for special happiness hours. Sometimes, the couple
use
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 a wedding organizer for their wedding plan about wedding dress, theme, photographer, place and food.
However
, some people think that not important to
spent
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 a lot of money on their wedding ceremony. It
depend
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 on
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marine
marriage
marige
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the marige
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couple
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satisfy
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. They will celebrate
on
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in
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simple
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a simple
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 way that they will save their money. In conclusion, a wedding celebration is a wonderful moment in part of life.
This
 special memory for the wedding couple and their family.
However
, it depends on many factors about social value, budget, satisfy.
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