Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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for
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all
government
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.
In addition
, Some peoples think governments should spend money on rail
systems
more than
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on roads
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roads
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systems
. That
are
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opinion
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that I totally agree
in
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this
concept. In the following
parapraph
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paragraph
paragraphs
, I will explain my reasons.
First
,
Roads
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systems
motivate
people
to have
an
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own cars. If cars were produced in majority demand, It will
brings
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a lot of social problems
such
as traffic congestion and PM2.5 air pollution.
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Moreover
, In
real
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situation,
Transport
by cars
are
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not related to
motivate
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people
to use public
transport
. All developed countries must motivate
people
to use public
transport
.
Secondly
,
Railway
systems
are a lot of
beneficial
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. The train can
carried
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a lot of passengers and products. It easily to import and export all human resources.
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Moreover
,
Railway
systems
are
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motivate long-term investment. Not only in nearly
railway
lines but
also
in cities of all regionals. It can contribute work, hope and civilization to the
countrysides
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. Local
people
can
transport
to
city
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easily
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to find
a careers
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, reach better medical treatments and better education
systems
.
In addition
, The best things that
developed
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in
city
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can export to the
countrysides
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.
Thirdly
,
Railway
systems
related to environmental policy that the United
Nation
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advises all countries decreasingly consumed oil energy and increasingly clean energy from electric power or natural power. So, Trains can use
eletricity
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electricity
energy. In conclusion, I could not agree more that government should
spent
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money on railways rather than roads.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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