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Band 4

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#governments #money #railways #roads
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Constructing and improving infrastructures are
duty
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for
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 all
government
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governments
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, Some peoples think governments should spend money on rail
systems
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 more than
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on roads
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roads
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road
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systems
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. That
are
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is
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opinion
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opinions
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 that I totally agree
in
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this
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 concept. In the following
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paragraph
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, I will explain my reasons.
First
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,
Roads
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Road
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systems
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 motivate
people
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 to have
an
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their
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 own cars. If cars were produced in majority demand, It will
brings
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 a lot of social problems
such
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 as traffic congestion and PM2.5 air pollution.
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Moreover
, In
real
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a real
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 situation,
Transport
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 by cars
are
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 not related to
motivate
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motivating
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people
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 to use public
transport
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. All developed countries must motivate
people
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 to use public
transport
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,
Railway
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systems
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 are a lot of
beneficial
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benefits
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. The train can
carried
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 a lot of passengers and products. It easily to import and export all human resources.
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Moreover
,
Railway
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systems
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are
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apply
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motivate long-term investment. Not only in nearly
railway
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 lines but
also
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 in cities of all regionals. It can contribute work, hope and civilization to the
countrysides
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countryside
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. Local
people
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 can
transport
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 to
city
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the city
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easily
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 to find
a careers
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a career
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, reach better medical treatments and better education
systems
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, The best things that
developed
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 in
city
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the city
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 can export to the
countrysides
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countryside
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.
Thirdly
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,
Railway
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systems
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 related to environmental policy that the United
Nation
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Nations
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 advises all countries decreasingly consumed oil energy and increasingly clean energy from electric power or natural power. So, Trains can use
eletricity
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electricity
 energy. In conclusion, I could not agree more that government should
spent
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 money on railways rather than roads.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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