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In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

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It is true that science and technology help to improve every aspect of agriculture. Even though there are some advancements, there are still lots of
people
 around the nation who do not have enough
food
.
This
 essay will discuss some reasons behind
this
 and put forward some solutions to solve
this
 problem. The predominant factors resulting in
this
 problem are inflation and ignorance of authority.
Firstly
, the price of most things is beyond the capacity of poor
people
 because they cannot afford
food
 for the whole family especially if it is a large family.
Secondly
, the carelessness of the government is another prime reason. According to a survey posted in Times India, fifty-five per cent of
people
 in shelters sleep on empty stomachs because they do not have enough
food
 to eat.
However
, there are some necessary steps that should be taken to tackle
this
 issue. At
first
, the government should check the price of every
food
 and the price of the basic
food
 should not be high so that every citizen can buy it.
In addition
, the authority should ensure some basic needs of every citizen like
food
, clothes, houses, education and so on.
Moreover
, the authority should ensure enough meals in the shelter.
This
 way nobody sleeps without
food
. These steps reduce the number of
people
 who are still angry. In conclusion, as everybody has the right to have foodstuff in their daily life, the government should take some crucial steps to decrease the number of hungry
people
 which I already mentioned above.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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