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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think is a positive or negative development.

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In the past, it was unfamiliar to find the same items across the
world
. Nowadays, nations are more likely to seem alike, due to
people
 having the ability to purchase the same
products
 whatever place in the
world
. In
this
 essay, I will argue that
countries
 are becoming much more similar is a negative development for society and individuals.
To begin
 with, every single
country
 has its own identity, history and culture, so becoming similar to other
countries
 would be removed all thesekindsds of things. To illustrate, in my
country
 we have a locally famous and cultural meal called sushi
also
 very old, if
people
 started to buy meals
such
 as MacDonald’s or hamburgers, and consume far more than local
food
, it would probably disappear in
next
 years.
Therefore
, in the
future
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 a culture
food
 disappdipearsh means the
next
 generation will get in eat or even though, know what their grandparents eat and their own
food
.
As a result
 of that, the identity of the
country
 would be faded because MacDonald’s is not our local
food
.
Hence
, the variety in society as compared with others is going to become the same.
Furthermore
,
for
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each
country
 across the
world
 has its own economy and industry. So, if all
countries
 purchase the same
products
, it would be any future development in some
countries
,
in particular
 developing
countries
.
For instance
, the USA is the
most
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country
 in the
world
 that produces electric cars, or not the only. If
this
still
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on
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this
 situation and nothing alter
I
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 other nations, it would make the other nations stick with the USA for
this
 product due to the lack of other alike
products
 that have the same function. What is more, if someday the factory of these electric cars in the USA falls down and had some issues, ultimately, it obtain a huge issue around the
world
 especially if
people
 become completely rely on these
products
.
Moreover
, the price of these
products
 will rise significantly which led the poor
people
 cannot afford to purchase
this
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products
. To sum up, being similar among
countries
 is a negative development which, has many drawbacks on several sides.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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