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The environmental problems facing today's world are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. Government and large companies should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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These days people place a premium on having a safe place to live in. Some people argue that environmental problems are so expanded that individuals can’t do anything about
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 think
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 and large companies should be responsible for that. In my
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 both government and human beings can share responsibility. To advance a convincing theory I could deal with
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people who want to reduce pollution, I could say they must carpool to school or to work or use public transportation so as to reduce air and noise pollution. On top of that, we can plant more threes.
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, there is a free space in our
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 for planting.
In addition
 to what I have just said, renewable energy can be utilized
instead
 of fossil fuels.
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, gone is the idea of driving cars that use gas as fuel. These days electric cars are more popular.
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 individuals have
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 impact,
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 could even help more. New rules should be published.
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 should be imposed
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 hunting and deforestation for construction. They can
also
 expand farming that
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leads to desertification. For large companies use of environmentally-friendly equipment can reduce waste. Not
last
 but not least, it is plain to see everything will be better with
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strict
 rules. We all know Malesia is one of the cleanest cities in the world because of
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 expansive fines. They
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street-sweeper
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. To conclude, global warming is caused on the grounds of greenhouse gases all of
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 that
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 mentioned above can pay off.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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