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Young people say that travelling to different countries benefits them and the society. Do you agree or disagree. Give your opinion

#people #countries #society
There are some young
people
 who believe that going to different nations profits not only them but
also
 the
society
. I will be going to discuss
about
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this
 statement and in the end, I will give my own opinion.
To begin
 with,
in addition
 to having fun travelling to other states, there are some other benefits as well.
Firstly
, when the individuals go to the other regions, they could familiarize
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 the culture and traditions there.
Also
, they could see the historical areas which usually
people
 after seeing these areas, they tempted to search about there and getting some information about the history and the origin of that place. It means they subconsciously improve their general knowledge
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 just visiting
such
 areas.
Secondly
, going
people
 to other countries has a
lot
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 benefits on different aspects of the
society
. The
first
 one which
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could be improved by tourists
,
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 is the economy of the
society
. What I mean is that the tourists when came to other countries, they usually want to
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 some things as a memento of that country. The consequence of
that is
 that it causes the economy of that region to rotate. The
second
 advantage of having
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 in a community is that the community can introduce itself to the whole world through them. It means when a
traveler
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 enjoys a place, he/she will subconsciously recommend it to
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others. In conclusion, I truly agree with the young
people
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believes
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 that travelling to other regions could benefit both the
traveler
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 and the
society
.
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