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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Nowadays, there are some arguments about the expenditure of money on the quality of transportation
ways
. Some people believe that most of the government’s money should spend on
railways
, while others say it should spend on
roads
. I will be going to discuss
this
 statement and in the end, I will give my own opinion. It is a fact that both of them are an essential part of the world. There are millions of people who transport by these
ways
 among the cities or countries.
Then
 it is better to take care of both. One of the reasons why the government should consider more budgets for
railways
 is that they are safer than
roads
.
This
 is because they are less affected by weather, faster and more reliable
ways
.
On the other hand
, it is more convenient to have daily travel and not to face traffic jams.
On the contrary
, neglecting
roads
 may cause serious problems
such
 as accidents. Because most of the supplies are transported in
this
 way, governments have to regard
roads
.
Also
, in some cases there are not any
railways
 to reach your destination
for
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 instance, rural areas are only accessible by vehicles. Those items lead the governments to pay attention to
roads
. In conclusion, I believe that both
ways
 are as important as each other
,
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 because they play a critical role in human lives. So in my opinion, governments must have a balance in spending money on
railways
 and
roads
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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