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Reading for pleasure can develop imagination and language skills better than watching TV. Do you agree or disagree?

#pleasure #imagination #language #skills #tv
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Today, reinforcing the imagination and language skills have become one of the most significant issues around the world, especially among
children
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 educational systems.
althogh
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although
, there
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wide
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 range of
controverses
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controversies
 related to which method is the best reading or watching TV programmes, in my
prespective
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perspective
, I agree with
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 group and I will explain more in
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Firstly
, it is clear that by reading the
story books
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, magazines or any physical books we can observe conveniently the phrases and words, by which I mean not only we would learn about the words' dictation, but
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Furthermore
, it would obviously foster our
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pronunciation
, particularly if those materials have hard
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disk
 like CD or DVD that possess the audio voices.
Finally
, children would read loudly
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 of sentences and
then
 they can definitely be
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 by their tutors or even parents, which can make a huge
poromotion
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promotion
 on child's ability in terms of reading, listening and
also
 speaking. Obviously, I agree that watching TV series and family programmes have a wide range of merit and it would solely
leads
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 to a lot of
improvment
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improvement
 in our skills
such
 as listening by its visual features,
however
, we can easily lose our concentration while watching,
in addition
, if there are no subtitles below that programme, we would not know anything about how those phrases have been written. To sum up, both tactics of
learnig
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learning
 languages and improving our imagination have some cons and pons,
however
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 I suppose the positive aspects of reading physical books have upper hand over others.
Submitted by Monsieur ciel on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • imagination
  • language skills
  • active engagement
  • creativity
  • vocabulary
  • language usage
  • passive
  • simplified
  • dialogue
  • depth
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