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Some people believe that the experiences children have before they go to school will have the greatest effect on their future life. Others argue that experiences gained when they are teenagers have a bigger influence. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

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Some people believe that youth adults are influenced by their experiences gained
in
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school
 period, while others often thought
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 pre-
school
 activities as a factor for
future
 development. Both sides of
life
 strongly affect
children
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children's
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 development
during
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on
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 the way
in
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to
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 becoming adults. In my opinion, experiences and time spent in
school
 are potentially a starting point for a
grown
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 in their
believes
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beliefs
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. on one hand, pre-
schoolars
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schoolers
scholars
 are buildable
in
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home
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the home
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 by their parents and their culture. Most of the time adults will let
children
 know their way to behave.
For example
, Eastern side countries believe in hard work as a way of self-development. Another example is China where
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family
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families
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 usually babies learn how to talk and write
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at
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home
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. Pre-
school
 abilities are a useful weapon when
school
 is up as
it
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 can ease
children
 learning and
therefore
 their
future
.
On the other hand
,
life
 in
school
 and
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high school
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highschool
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 is absolutely important, experiences gained either with friends or study teams are memorable.
For instance
,
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high school
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highschool
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 research is becoming more efficient in teams as it develops teamwork
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which
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wich
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 is vital for any workplace, due to the demand
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 results rapidly.
Moreover
, information learnt in
school
 is a base for any
carreer
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career
carrier
 which is crucial for any
person
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person's
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 self-development due to the difficulty of any degree, a certain level of knowledge is required.
As
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 an instance, Degrees in South America demand a high level of maths which
are
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 fundamental for any degree.
school
life
 is very important either for any job or studies. To sum up,
children
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children's
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 development
in
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at
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home
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the home
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 is important for
thie
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the
future
 as
children
 can be easy instruct to behave.
Nonetheless
, in my
opinion
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School
life
 is a key to develop boost abilities for studies and
workplace
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 and as a
consequently
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consequence
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 increasing the chances for a better
future
.
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