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you live in a room in college which you share with another student. however, there are many problems with this arrangements and you find it very difficult to work write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college, in your letter, - describe the situation - explain your problem and why it is difficult to work - say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to draw your attention to the problems faced by me in room number 27 which is in the B block of William Harry College. At the onset, to describe the bad situation of my stay
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this
 room,
first
 of all, the behaviour of
Mr.
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 John, my
roomate
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roommate
, is
unbearble
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unbearable
. Because of his angry nature, he is always ready to fight
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 unnecessary things. In fact, he is least interested
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into
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 the cleanliness of the room and the bad condition of the washroom is beyond words. All these things are making my stay here
is
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identical to a herculean task and I cannot anticipate
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 good level of my health if I stay for a longer time here.
Lastly
, I would like to relocate
myself
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to
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 place and I would like to submit some of my
preference
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. Primarily, I do not want to share my new place with anyone so that I can find out my mental peace.
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, it will be really a great relief for me if my new place has no children or school nearby and especially the
land lord
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 should be
calm
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 and happy person and rent cost should be between $1200 to $1300. Look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Harry Brown
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