you live in a room in college which you share with another student. however, there are many problems with this arrangements and you find it very difficult to work write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college, in your letter, - describe the situation - explain your problem and why it is difficult to work - say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir, I am writing

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letter to draw your attention to the problems faced by me in room number 27 which is in the B block of William Harry College. At the onset, to describe the bad situation of my stay

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of all, the behaviour of

Mr.

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John, my

roomate

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roommate

, is

unbearble

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unbearable

. Because of his angry nature, he is always ready to fight

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unnecessary things. In fact, he is least interested

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into

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the cleanliness of the room and the bad condition of the washroom is beyond words. All these things are making my stay here

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identical to a herculean task and I cannot anticipate

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good level of my health if I stay for a longer time here.

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, I would like to relocate

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new

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place and I would like to submit some of my

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. Primarily, I do not want to share my new place with anyone so that I can find out my mental peace.

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, it will be really a great relief for me if my new place has no children or school nearby and especially the

land lord

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should be

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and happy person and rent cost should be between $1200 to $1300. Look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Harry Brown

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

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7 paragraphs

217 words

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