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many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. some people however that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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In
this
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 modern economic world, many countries across the globe
is
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 racing to be at
topmost
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 position in financial status. Some media staff, parents, environmental activists, and social activists often argue that there are many other significant challenges which should be
priortised
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prioritised
 by policymakers;
however
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, I believe authorities must give precedence to the economic progress.
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 with, almost every nation in
this
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 world should have
stable
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a stable
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economy
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 to run the system and provide desired facilities for their citizens.
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 and foremost, for policymakers, financial stability is an important attribute to
run
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 the system
this
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 is because without funds they cannot rule their
country
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. To explain
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,
governements
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governments
 require funds to pay salaries,
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manage the law & order, and for imports & exports of goods.
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, to
fulfill
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 some of their
citizen
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citizens
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 needs, they must invest in building infrastructure.
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, some people submit
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a request
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request
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requests
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 to
polticians
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politicians
 to build public gardens, parks, sports clubs, hospitals, roads and so on which require a huge amount of money.
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, without any doubt
economy
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 drives the
devlopment
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development
redevelopment
 of the
country
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.
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, apart from the
economy
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, no one can deny that there are many other sectors
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 to be focused
,
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for
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instance
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education
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 sector and
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health
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the health
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 sector.
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,
education
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 is a basic right for everyone so
polticians
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politicians
 must ensure everyone in their
country
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 must get free
education
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.
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, many developed countries like the USA and Canada
provides
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 free
education
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 for their residents.
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education
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, they must focus on
health
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 care to provide good
health
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 services by training more doctors and investing
on
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 the
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next generation
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technology
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of technology
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.
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, Imaginably, they must build multi-speciality hospitals
accross
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across
 their
country
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 with
world class
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 doctors and equipment.
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, everyone in the
country
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 will have access to
the
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apply
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education
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 and
health
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 services.
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, to recapitulate, certain people argue that economic progress cannot be a primary goal for governments;
however
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, I think that every other factor depends on
the
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a
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 stable
economy
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 so without
this
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 financial stability they cannot achieve
other factor
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another factor
other factors
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 like good
health
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 &
education
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 services.
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