many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. some people however that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

In
this
modern economic world, many countries across the globe
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racing to be at
topmost
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position in financial status. Some media staff, parents, environmental activists, and social activists often argue that there are many other significant challenges which should be
priortised
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prioritised
by policymakers;
however
, I believe authorities must give precedence to the economic progress.
To begin
with, almost every nation in
this
world should have
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economy
to run the system and provide desired facilities for their citizens.
First
and foremost, for policymakers, financial stability is an important attribute to
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the system
this
is because without funds they cannot rule their
country
. To explain
further
,
governements
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governments
require funds to pay salaries,
to
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manage the law & order, and for imports & exports of goods.
In addition
, to
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some of their
citizen
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needs, they must invest in building infrastructure.
For instance
, some people submit
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request
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to
polticians
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politicians
to build public gardens, parks, sports clubs, hospitals, roads and so on which require a huge amount of money.
Therefore
, without any doubt
economy
drives the
devlopment
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development
redevelopment
of the
country
.
On the other hand
, apart from the
economy
, no one can deny that there are many other sectors
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to be focused
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instance
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education
sector and
health
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sector.
Firstly
,
education
is a basic right for everyone so
polticians
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politicians
must ensure everyone in their
country
must get free
education
.
For example
, many developed countries like the USA and Canada
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free
education
for their residents.
Besides
education
, they must focus on
health
care to provide good
health
services by training more doctors and investing
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the
next generation
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technology
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.
For instance
, Imaginably, they must build multi-speciality hospitals
accross
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across
their
country
with
world class
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doctors and equipment.
As a result
, everyone in the
country
will have access to
the
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education
and
health
services.
Finally
, to recapitulate, certain people argue that economic progress cannot be a primary goal for governments;
however
, I think that every other factor depends on
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stable
economy
so without
this
financial stability they cannot achieve
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like good
health
&
education
services.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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