Your friend is about to celebrate a landmark birthday and would welcome suggestions as to how it should be celebrated. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter * Say what type of party should be held e.g. themed, fancy dress, black tie event * Suggest a suitable venue * Make a recoomendation as to entertainment e.g. Dj, jazz band etc.

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Dear Smith, Hope you are doing well. It had

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long time since we

last

met. I am really very happy to know that your birthday is coming

week. I have fascinating ideas to plan your birthday

party

and hope you will like them. In regards to the clothes, all people must wear

fansy

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fancy

dresses as everyone get a chance to show their creativity.

Moreover

, it will capture some beautiful moments with beautiful clothes. Apart from that, there is one famous Mahek Palace to

held

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birthday parties.

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palace is

near

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your home and has a big hall where we can organize all activities

such

as games for others.

In addition

, entertainment is an essential part of every

party

or event. I think Dj will be

best

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option for entertainment. We will play all

kind

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party

music which will add more value to the

party

. I hope you will like my suggestions. Best wishes, Sandeep

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6 paragraphs

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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