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Only rich people should donate to charity. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #charity
Opinions are divided on whether
this
 means of social responsibility to donate to charity should count on rich
people
 or not. In my opinion, I totally agree with
such
an
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observation for two main reasons. It is unfair to see the world separated into two parts with wealth and poverty correspondingly.
Thus
, it is the duty of the rich to contribute to charity for a better life for
such
 the needy as the elderly, the orphaned, etc.
This
 is because if
people
 want to root out and reduce the rate of
the
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underprivilege, the elite class would have to lead the way in doing that. To illustrate, The Red Cross is a typical example as its aim is to be set up with the wealthiest countries who will be able to aid the poorer nations
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 food, shelter or medicine. As a consequence,
the
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 sense of humanity arises which
consequently
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 the world a better place to live for both the rich and the poor. Some opponents claim that not only the rich who have to be responsible
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 supporting finance or other non-monetary items to charitable organizations but
also
 the middle class, despite lower income, need to lend a helping hand in order to diminish the destitute.
Hence
, anyone can grasp the chance to support
people
 who are in need.
Although
 there is validity to the given argument, it would be a wrong idea to think in that way. Since the most crucial characteristic of a benefactor is to donate with a heart of gold as “Love grows by giving”. By supporting finance, simultaneously they are promoting human rights to all mankind irrespective of gender, race, sexuality or even religion.
As a result
, it can be said that only wealth can serve the poor, but none. In conclusion, even though it is undeniable that everyone can help other
people
 with bread and butter, I strongly believe that it is the duty of wealthy individuals of being a money
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 to charity so as to gradually make the social balance between them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • philanthropy
  • broader spectrum
  • mutual aid
  • affluent
  • foundations
  • oversimplifies
  • multifaceted
  • socioeconomic
  • inclusive
  • democratizing donations
  • online fundraising platforms
  • social media campaigns
  • micro-donations
  • driving social change
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