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Some people who have been is prison become good citizen later, some people think that they are the best people to talk to the school student about the danger of committing a crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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The chart illustrates the
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 of populations of different genders pursuing their
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 either full-time or part-time basis in Britain for three consecutive years. Overall, there were increased
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 of full-time and part-time students furthering their studies from 1970 to 1991.
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, there was a significant difference between the
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 of students who took full-time and part-time studies over the years. The highest
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 of females furthering their part-time
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 was in 1990-1991 with the total
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 of 110,000 while in males, which the highest was in 1970-1971 with 100,000.
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 to the part-time basis, the
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 of populations doing the full-time
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 is a way lesser than the part-time. Being said that, the lowest
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 can be seen in 1970/71 for both men and women. The
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 of both populations continuing their
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 as full-time students growing over the years with the highest
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 being in 1990/91. In 1990/91 , more than 200,000 females and furthering their full-time studies.
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