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One of the major issues facing the world today is overpopulation. What problems arise from this situation? What measures can be taken to deal with it?

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The
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one of the major issues which
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 overpopulation. The analysis contained within the following paragraphs will explore the issues and
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 in greater detail. The main problem is that our children will face
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great problems in their life
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jobless
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 and housing
shortage
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.
Secondly
, If
population
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 grows up without control
it
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, the
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human
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 solution is that
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certainly
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 people should become aware
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this
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 issues tourable.
Moreover
, the governments can give special
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 or
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 for small families.
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, the children who are from small families to have
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choic
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 in their job or university. In conclusion, there can be a lot of problems
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growing
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population
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 in the
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 distraction and creating financial problems. The social media and government have to present information and
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 golden
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encouraging
 who accept their advice.
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