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the costs of international travel are decreasing and tourism is growing . what are the advantages and disadvantages.

#costs #travel #tourism
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The international
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International
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traveled
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travel
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 decreasing and tourism is growing.
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this
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 event in the cost of
traveling
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travelling
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 can have a lot of advantages, it may bring some drawbacks as well. The most
advantages
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advantage
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 is that historical
places
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 will become visited more than
befor
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before
 by new
touristes
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tourists
.
At
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the
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a
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result
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 those will get more famous among most people in the world with growing tourism.
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, people will have
creat
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create
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 new job in other countries to find
job
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a job
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 when the international travel
are
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is
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 decreasing.
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, while historical
places
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 have too
much
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many
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visitors, those
places
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 can be damaged.
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 damage will happen very sooner with growing up tourism.
Moveover
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Moreover
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, the big businesses between huge companies in different countries will stop the reason is that decreasing international travel have
effect
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an effect
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 on businesses. In conclusion, there can be a lot of advantages
in
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to
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this
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 issue
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 as making new
job
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jobs
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 and
recognition
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recognising
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 historical
places
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. It may have negative
point
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points
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such
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 as stopping new jobs and damaging historical
places
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.
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