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Fossil fuels is the main source of energy. In some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy is encouraged. To what extent do you think is it positive or negative development?

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Instead
 of fossil
fuels
,
alternative
 sources of
energy
is
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 gaining more popularity in some countries. From my perspective,
this
 trend
bring
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 about
both
 positive and negative aspects,
however
, I believe its advantages outweigh the disadvantages. It is unquestionable that there are several benefits of
alternative
of
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resources. Eco-friendly
energy
such
 as wind power, Hydropower and solar
energy
 are considered
as
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green power.
According
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 the local research, cars using hydropower
energy
 can reduce
the
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carbon emission by 50% compared to using
fuels
.
Therefore
, the government of many countries encourage people to use clean
energy
.
In other words
,
both
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cost
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costs
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 of
import
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importing
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 eco-friendly
car
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cars
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 is subsidized and tax is exempted for importing business by the government so that people are able to purchase
it
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them
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in
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at
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lower
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a lower
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price
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prices
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. Another advantage is that
alternative
energy
 is cheaper than fossil
fuels
. Because
the
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 limitation of
fuels
,
its
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their
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 price is likely to increase in the future.
On the other hand
, natural sources are not limited
both
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to both
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quantity
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quantities
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 to produce and areas to be found. Even though
initial
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cost
 or changing
cost
 is high, it worth
for
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the
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 useful period in the long run.
For instance
, in Thailand, buying
new
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a new
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 eco-car might
cost
 2 times higher than
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a fuels
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fuels
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fuel
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 car but the
break even
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 point will meet around 2 years because using solar
energy
 cars
cost
 around 5 Baht per
kilometer
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kilometre
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 while using
fuels
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fuel
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 cars
cost
 around 15 baht per
kilometer
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kilometre
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. In conclusion, based on the
above mentioned
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 explanations,
alternative
 resources are beneficial sources
as
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of
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 sustainable
energy
 for people in
both
this
 generation and
next
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the next
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 generation.
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