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nowadays there are many people who have self employed than working in the office do you agree? what is the disadvantages? give the reason!

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Era, many youngsters and graduate students prefer to be their own bosses rather than
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 on others. In my view, I totally agree with
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 statement that self-employed is now becoming a trend day by day in the minds of individuals.
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,
on the other hand
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, there are some disadvantages which we will discuss
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 with, the biggest
pros
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pro
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 of
self-employed
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being self-employed
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 is freedom. While being an officer in one's company needs to depend on the manager all the time whereas, being a
freelancee
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freelancer
freelance
 does not.
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 it means that being a freelancer is able to rely on
oneself
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himself
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 and
also
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 he can choose his own work style, workplace, or even schedule. It can be seen that
this
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 type of
actions
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are
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 far better
instead
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 of working for the organisation. For, example in a company employees has to follow one protocol in order to accomplish
job
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a job
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 whereas, being a freelancer there is no
such
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preasure
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pressure
pleasure
. In spite of all
thes
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these
the
this
facts
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 there are some cons of doing a freelancing. To illustrate
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, in many
companies
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,companies
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 there are
lot
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a lot
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 of partners who give effective ideas for the improvement of the company. But in
freelance
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 it just
come
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 from one
person
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. Another disadvantage of these is
lack
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 of communication between the people
so
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apply
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,
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lead
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 to
lack
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a lack
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 of socialization.
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, self-employed are not paid any salaries as they receive money in form of wages, Which means they will not get the same amount of income every month.
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, another two disadvantages of being
individual
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an individual
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 worker
is
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high
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a high
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 business risk when
individual
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an individual
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become
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 bankrupt and
also
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 fluctuating income. In conclusion, I would like to say that being
a
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self-employed or working in
a
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an
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 organisation differs from
person
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 to
person
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.
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 I believe that
individual
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an individual
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 employed has both sides negative as well as positive and
it's depend
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it depends
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 upon the perspective of the particular
person
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