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Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on earth. Do you agree or disagree? Show ideas and vocabulary

Space
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exploration
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 has always been a topic of debate, with some arguing that it is a superfluous expense,
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 others believe it is crucial for scientific and technological progress.
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 it is true that
space
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 programs require substantial financial investment, I strongly disagree with the idea that the money should be diverted
elsewhere
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. One major benefit of
space
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exploration
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 is the advancement of technology that improves everyday life. Many inventions,
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 as GPS, satellite communications, and medical imaging, originated from
space
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 research.
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, NASA’s research on astronaut health led to the development of MRI and CT scans, which are now widely used in hospitals. If
space
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 programs were discontinued, scientific progress in these fields would slacken, limiting potential breakthroughs that enhance human life.
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,
space
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exploration
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 plays a vital role in addressing global issues,
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 as climate change and resource scarcity. Satellites help monitor environmental changes, predict natural disasters, and track deforestation, enabling governments to take preventive measures.
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, exploring other planets may provide solutions to Earth’s dwindling resources.
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, scientists are researching asteroid mining, which could supply rare minerals essential for modern technology without
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 damaging Earth’s environment. In conclusion,
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space
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exploration
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 is costly, its long-term benefits far outweigh the expenses. It fosters technological advancements and provides valuable insights into pressing global issues.
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 of cutting funding for
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 programs, governments should view them as an investment in humanity’s future, ensuring continued scientific progress and sustainability.

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task achievement
Your introduction clearly states your position, but try to make your thesis statement more specific.
coherence and cohesion
You have used good linking words, but vary them more to improve the flow of your essay.
task achievement
Add one more example in the body paragraphs for stronger support of your points.
content
Your ideas are well-developed and lead to a clear conclusion.
content
You used examples that are relevant and enhance your arguments.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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